初一学生英语日记批改

我是一个初一的学生写了一篇日记:我的一天。有语法错误吗?请老师评判一下。

I get up at six in the morning. Then I have wash my face and brush my teeth. After that I had a quick beakfest. Next I go to school. I have four lessons in the morning. After classes is over, I go home. I have lunch at 12:00. I have three lessons to learn in the afternoon . I went to home at 5:00. I have done homework at home. Finary I go to bed at ten in the evening. this's all my a day. 

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最佳答案 2018-12-10 10:48

I get up at six in the morning. Then I have wash my face and brush my teeth. After that I had a quick beakfest. Next I go to school. I have four lessons in the morning. After classes is over, I go home. I have lunch at 12:00. I have three lessons to learn in the afternoon. I went to home at 5:00. I have done homework at home. Finary I go to bed at ten in the evening. this's all my a day.  (红色部分为错误或不足


修改如下(尽量保持原样):

I get up at six in the morning. Then I wash my face and brush my teeth. After that I have a quick beakfest. Next I go to school. I have four lessons in the morning. After class, I go home. I have lunch at 12:00. In the afternoon I have three lessons to learn (本句把in the afternoon 提到句首,让句子富有变化). I go home at 5:00. I do homework at home. Finally I go to bed at ten in the evening. That's my whole day. 

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zbr1016.
你这里面都是过去的动作,统一为一般过去时就好。
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