10 考研英语2000年卷作文批改

请求老师帮忙修改作文中的语法错误,感谢!

以下是我自己写的作文的内容(请老师帮忙修改这篇作文中的语法错误,感谢!):


As is shown on this two pictures: In 1900,there are a marjority of fishes in the waters while only one ship on thewaters. And yet, in 1995, there are only one fish while a host of ships on thewaters.

 

Obviously, the drawer of the pictures want to show us that the number offishes has been decreasing rapidly because of the commercial fishing all overthe world. Perhaps the drawer want to remind us the importance of protectingthe fishing craft. Since the overdue activities of hunting fishes may cause thedisappearance of the fishing. Fishermen shouldn't neglect the sustainabledevelopment in order to obtain the short-term benefit. We disapprove of thecomplete ban on hunting fishes. But we don't agree the severe activities ofhunting which do more harm than good.

 

Thus, the department involved should tell the fishermen of theimportance that keep an mild hunting activity. In addition, they can make someregulations to stop the fishermen from hunting in slack season.

 

以下是作文题目要求(考研英语一2000年卷作文题目):

1. Describe the pictures.

2. Deduce the purpose of the drawer in the pictures.

3. Suggest counter-measures.(A Brief History of World Commercial Fishing)


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最佳答案 2019-04-11 12:52

As is shown on this two pictures: In 1900, there are a marjority of fishes in the waters while only one ship on thewaters. And yet, in 1995, there are only one fish while a host of ships on the waters.

As is shown in these two pictures, in 1900 there were plenty of fishes but only one fishboat on the waters, while in 1995 there was only one fish but fleets of fishboats on the same waters.

 

Obviously, the drawer of the pictures want to show us that the number of fishes has been decreasing rapidly because of the commercial fishing all over the world. Perhaps the drawer want to remind us the importance of protecting the fishing craft. Since the overdue activities of hunting fishes may cause the disappearance of the fishing. Fishermen shouldn't neglect the sustainable development in order to obtain the short-term benefit. We disapprove of the complete ban on hunting fishes. But we don't agree the severe activities of hunting which do more harm than good.

Obviously, the drawer of the picture wants to show us that the number of fishes has been decreasing rapidly because of the conmmercial fishing all over the world. Perhaps the drawer is remiding us of the importance of protecting fishing industry since excessive catching may lead to the disappearance of the fishing industry. Fishermen should keep in mind the sustanable development rather than gain the short-term benefits. We disapprove of a complete ban on catching fish. We don't agree, either, on the excessinve catching, which would do more harm than good.

 

Thus, the department involved should tell the fishermen of the importance that keep an mild hunting activity. In addition, they can make some regulations to stop the fishermen from hunting in slack season.

Thus, the authority should educate fishermen on the importance of rational fish-catching. In addition, they should make regulations to stop fishermen from catcing in fishing-off season.

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